根據經驗
每天練習寫一篇約50字的短文
可以大大增進英文的程度喔!!

練習的短文可以po在回應
每天的日記也行
任何突發奇想也行
我會盡量處理的!


要有點耐心喔!!


注意事項
1. 請不要設隱藏,這是個學習分享的地方,不用怕錯誤,你所犯的錯也許正成為別人的幫助!
2. 為了彼此尊重,請登入後再留言!
3. 再強調一次這是個彼此學習分享的地方,任何攻擊性的言語均不被歡迎,無條件刪除留言,並設為黑名單!
4. 當然也歡迎大家一起幫忙看看,試試看是不是可以找出需要修正的地方


歡迎真正想要把英文學好的各位囉!

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  • appleh21233
  • Today I feel badly.<br />
    Because I and my friend not talk <br />
    happy.She always not to friendly to <br />
    me,because she think I am her friend.<br />
    But I dont&#39;t like this , I have <br />
    feeling . Oh...just ok,time can bad <br />
    forget things.<br />
    <br />
    老師..你看不懂我可以翻譯:)
  • 呵呵

    我看的懂^^~

    建議修改為

    Today I feel so bad because I didn't have a good conversation with my friend. She is always mean to me and she said that's because I am her friend...But I don't like it! I also have feelings. Oh...it's okay...time can help me froget bad memories.



    1. 在感覺(feel)的時候用形容詞說出自己的感覺,所以用bad就好不要用副詞badly

    2. She always not to friendly to

    me 這句明顯沒有動詞,由於妳後面加的是friendly我想你要說的是形容詞,所以前面要用Be動詞

    3. time can bad forget things.這句沒有文法,這句的動詞是forget,在忘記的時候要說忘記什麼東西,不然會看不懂喔!



    希望我有幫上忙並且沒有誤會妳文章裡的意思^^



    By the way, true friends would care your feelings!!^^~

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • betty
  • Today is very hot.My sister her hands <br />
    is hurt.It is very ache.Ruby and I <br />
    are eat two apples. I study <br />
    English.Chinese and math.I am very <br />
    happy.
  • 動作真快!!

    建議修改為:

    It is hot today. My sister hurt her hands and they are aching. Ruby and I ate two apples. I studied English, Chinese and math today. I am very happy.



    第二句主詞重複,又是my sister又是her hands, 這兩個要選擇一下,



    ache這個字若你有查字典你會知道它不是形容詞而是動詞或名詞,所以不能very ache, 我們今天才說過,妳得用副詞去修飾動詞,並且你前面又有be動詞is, 這樣就重複動詞了,所以正確用法應該為it aches a lot, 但前一句你又用複數hands, 所以應該是they ache a lot, 若當名詞用就是there are a lot of aches, 我把它改為they are aching. 也可以用it is painful代替



    Ruby開頭這句重複動詞,看不出你是已經吃了(ate)還是正在吃(are eating),



    你今天讀了三個科目,study要用過去式,記得,現在簡單式只用在每天的習慣上或是不變的真理,因為你一開頭就是today, 看的人會直接想說這是你今天的行程,用現在簡單式就會怪怪的,除非你後面加一個everyday之類的把這件事便成一個固定的習慣



    這樣懂嗎?不懂再問^^~

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • ruby
  • Today is Thurday.<br />
    I piay badminton with Betty.<br />
    It very fun.<br />
    I study English and math,<br />
    Today is very happy.
  • 建議修改為

    Today is Thursday. I played badminton with Betty. It was fun. I studied English and math. I am very happy today.



    第二句的地方play拼錯並且要用過去式

    第三句缺動詞

    第四句動詞要用過去式

    最後一句怪怪的

    是"今天高興"還是"我今天很高興"?

    缺乏的是主詞喔!!^^

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • Ruby
  • Today is Wednesday.<br />
    we are study English&#39;listed music&#39;<br />
    and play computer game.<br />
    So,todayis fine.
  • 好,第二句又重複動詞了喔!!而且要注意拼字的部分,還有時態!!所以第二句應改成We studied English, listened to music, and played computer games. 注意,聽音樂要用listen to music喔!!

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • Sarah
  • Gina says that he didn&#39;t came an <br />
    English language class yesterday.So <br />
    had no time to get along with him.
  • 原句應改為
    Gina said that she won't come to the English class anymore, so I won't have time to get along with her.
    1. Gina說,已經說了要用過去式,她說她以後不來了要用未來式
    2. Gina是女生,→所以代名詞要用she,受格要用her
    3. 以後沒時間跟她相處了,得用未來式喔

    Ana 於 2016/03/25 18:38 回覆

  • betty
  • Today is very happy because it&#39;s not <br />
    go to school.I study English and <br />
    clean my bedroom.It very tired.
  • 原句應改為

    I am very happy today because I don't have to go to school. I studied English and cleaned my bedroom. It's very tiring.

    1. 第一句because後面妳說it's not go to school,除了又重複動詞之外,是妳不用上課還是妳家小狗不用上課?主詞用it妳發現哪裡怪了嗎?

    2.第二句又再次是時態問題,該用過去式的時候不用客氣

    3. 最後一句It was very tiring. 是說做這些事很累人,妳原本的It very tired沒有動詞,

    4. tired 疲累的 (通常用來形容人)

    She is tired of her job.

    This work makes me tired.

    5. tiring 令人感到疲累的 (形容事物)

    This is a tiring work. (o)

    This is a tired work. (x)

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • Ice Cream acts a love-brige roll during my parents and <br />
    me; it symbols something changes better. Today I was <br />
    encouraged from my Mom about my hand-made business <br />
    after inviting her to be a background-supporter. Then <br />
    She asked me for using coupon and bringing all Royal <br />
    Horn of High-life as much as possible with NT200 cash. <br />
    PM11:50, Father and I was breathing fresh night air <br />
    within her wish unfailingly, and we enjoyed the sweet <br />
    family roll together.
  • 1. 扮演...的角色是用play...role, 像扮演一個重要的角色就用play an important role,不然就要用act as 扮演著,我想妳是要說在妳和父母之間扮演著一座愛的橋樑, 這裡love得改成形容詞loving, 所以可以寫成acts as a loving bridge,

    2. 在妳和妳父母之間三者以上用among, during後面要接的是一段時間,像是暑假期間during the summer vacation, 所以這裡要用的是among my parents and me.

    3. symbol一般當名詞用, 所以這裡妳要用symbolize (象徵著), 事情的轉變英文一般用become, 並且建議使用現在完成式(have/has+ p.p.)來強調 “事情已經變好並持續著” 所以這句可以寫成it symbolizes something has become better.

    4. 第二句妳被媽媽鼓勵要用by my mom, 這句太長了, 雖然看得懂, 文法也大致沒問題, 但還是建議把它改得俐落一點, 當然, 必須符合妳的原意, 以下擇一,

    (1) Today my mom encouraged me by supporting my hand-made business.

    (2) Today I was encouraged by my mom for she is willing to support my hand-made business.

    5. 接下來要買冰淇淋是吧?!ask+人+ to+ V. 叫某人做某事, 所以這句應寫成asked me to use coupons to buy Royal Horns as many as possible within 200 dollars from High Life (萊爾富對吧?).

    6. 最後一句寫的好像在寫小說情境喔!!呵呵!!厲害!!那個roll應該指的是上面提到的角色吧→ role! 其實改成loving bridge更有感覺喔!! 還有這句妳用過去進行式開頭,結果後面and之後卻回到過去式, and是對等連接詞,所以要用相同的型態! 對我而言within her wish unfailingly有點多餘了,因為妳後面就說一起吃,就不需要這句, 還有fresh night air…晚上11:50當然是night air…這也多餘了,不過看的出妳很浪漫啦!!這句直接說That night, the three of us enjoyed the fresh air and the sweet family loving bridge together.



    所以總整理如下:

    Ice Cream acts as a loving

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • essoncheng
  • Opps..七樓是我的
  • Oops!

    上面放不下了

    放這兒吧!!剛好!!:)



    所以總整理如下:

    Ice cream acts as a loving bridge among my parents and me. It symbolizes something has become better. Today I was encouraged by my mom for she is willing to support my hand-made business. Then she asked me to use coupons to buy Royal Horns as many as possible within 200 dollars from High Life. Finally, the three of us enjoyed the fresh air and the sweet family “loving bridge” together.

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • Sarah
  • This Friday to Sunday, I told the aunt. Cousin. Father. <br />
    Mother and brother together to Taitung to find a very <br />
    small period of aunt I now look forward to the arrival <br />
    Friday.
  • I am going to Taitung to visit my aunt with my parents, my brother, and my cousin from Friday to Sunday. I am looking forward to it.

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • Ruby
  • Today is very happy.Becuse the Moon Festival, we are<br />
    shoot off fireworks and eat pomelos.<br />
    Everybody can relax and enjoy the joy of a reunion.<br />
    So,I very excited on Moon Festivel.
  • Today I am very happy because the Moon Festival is coming. We are going to let off fireworks and eat pomelos. Everybody can relax and enjoy the joy of family reunion. So I am very excited of it.



    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • betty
  • Today my family went to restaurant on the Father&#39;s <br />
    Day.We ate cabbage,rice,tofu and soup. It&#39;s very <br />
    good.I and Ruby studied English.Today was very <br />
    happy.
  • Today I went to a restaurant for Father's Day with my family. We had cabbage, rice, tofu and soup. I was good. Ruby and I also studied English. I am very happy.

    前面在講父親節,後面突然冒出讀英文,會很唐突,所以句中加個also, 說明除了去餐廳之外,"也"讀了英文, 另外,請注意主詞的位置!!

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • Ruby
  • Today is Tuesday.I am very happy,Because I am not go<br />
    to school and I can play with the puppy.<br />
    So,today is very happy.
  • Today is Tuesday. I am very happy because I don't have to go to any class and I can play with the puppy. I enjoy today.

    注意不要重複動詞,說不用...用don't have to...

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • Betty
  • Today I was very happy because is not went to school.I <br />
    so glad.I and Ruby were play with dog.I studied <br />
    English.My sister was very angry .I was not know answer.
  • Today I am very happy because I don't have to go to classes. Ruby and I played with dogs and studied English. My sister was very angry and I don't know why.

    跟12樓的一樣,說 不用...用don't have to...

    代名詞要注意順序: 單數人稱2→3→1,複數人稱1→2→3

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • Sarah
  • Yesterday I with daddy Mother goes to maternal family <br />
    mother to kill<br />
    the chicken together because tomorrow will need to <br />
    break off a<br />
    relationship I on to play with the younger male cousin <br />
    younger female<br />
    cousin They in play the water I to look in side Sees <br />
    to as soon as<br />
    manages is suddenly pushed down plays Remembers <br />
    terroristly also!
  • 我快暈倒了,請重寫,不要查到什麼就亂湊,記得文法要通順!!加油!!!

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • appleh21233
  • ha ha ha <br />
    so miss you teacher~~<br />
    Are you feeling fine this summer?<br />
    en...i free hot and bring <br />
    see you~~
  • I am fine, and still busy.

    Thanks for your greetings!!

    You said you『free hot and bring..』

    I don't understand, could you explain that?

    :)

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • betty
  • Today is August twentieth and very hot day.In the <br />
    mornung Ruby and I listen to music.In the <br />
    afternoon we eat cookies drink lemontea and go to <br />
    math class. I&#39;m have a happy day.
  • Today is August twentieth and a very hot day. In the morning, Ruby and I listened to music and we ate cookies, drank lemon tea, and then we went to the math class. I have a happy day.

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • Ruby
  • Today is Thursay.It is very hot. I and Betty play <br />
    basketball in the morning. Game mach the winner is me.<br />
    So,today we are playing basketball very happy and hope<br />
    to play next time.
  • Today is Thursday and it is very hot. Betty and I played basketball in the morning, and I won. So, we have a good day and hope to play basketball together again next time.

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • Sarah
  • Today is Friday I one big gets out of bed the discovery <br />
    homework not to finish harms me to brush the tooth to <br />
    wash the face quickly.To flush makes up the homework. <br />
    Promptly thought otherwise fortunately must scold.
  • ㄟ...我只看的懂一些ㄝ...妳是說...

    「今天是星期五,我一大早起床發現作業沒有完成,害我得很快刷牙洗臉...」然後呢??@@"

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • Ruby
  • Today is Thursday. I.Betty.Harry and Sarah go in the<br />
    Country on foot together. It very tired and very hot.<br />
    So,today is very soso,because take the book go home.
  • Today is Thursday. Betty, Harry, Sarah and I went to school on foot together. We were very tired and it was very very hot. So, today I am so-so because we also took a lot of books home.

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • betty
  • The summer vacation is spend. I will go to junior <br />
    high school tomorrow.It&#39;s lot of textbooks.I <br />
    review the Chinese,Math and English.It&#39;s very <br />
    besy.Also My father and I go to bookstore,petstore <br />
    buy many books a glue,two market pens,three <br />
    notebooks and two fish.
  • The summer vacation is over. I am attending to the junior high school tomorrow. There are lots of testbooks. I reviewed Chinese, Math and English. I was very busy. My father and I also went to a bookstore to buy books, a bottle of glue, two highlighters and three notebooks. We also went to a petshop to buy two fish. It is really enjoyable.

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • 瞎毀??

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:02 回覆

  • Ruby
  • It is cloudy today.The wind is heavy too.The computer<br />
    lesson has not been had today.But,today is not go to <br />
    school.So,today is fine.
  • Ruby
  • My name is Ruby.I am thirteen years old.I am a girl.I <br />
    am from Taiwan.My hobby is playing basketball and <br />
    badminton.I am interested in reading novel.I like a <br />
    peace and quiet place.I like fruit because is very <br />
    yummy.And I favorite weather is sunny because I can <br />
    play the sport love.This is my self introduction.
  • My name is Ruby. I am thirteen years old. I am a girl from taiwan. I am interested in reading novels and I like peace and quiet places. I like furit because they are yummy. My favorite weather is sunny days because I can play everything I love, such as badminton, soccer, and basketball. This is my self introduction.

    ※斷句可以少一點,充分利用所學過的連接詞。

    ※寫的很順,good job!

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • Hello my name is Betty.I am thirteen years old.I bronen <br />
    at September forth.I&#39;m a student in the Rin Mei(仁美)<br />
    junuor high school.I like amimals also I have two <br />
    dogs.I love pink,blue and green.But I like eat food.<br />
    How about you?What do you like?
  • Hello, my name is Betty. I am thirteen years old, and was born on the fourth day of September. I am now a student in Zen-Mei Junior High School. I like animals and I have two pet dogs at home. My favorite colors are pink, blue and green, and I also love to eat. How about you? What do you like?

    ※最後兩句根本是湊字數...

    ※專有名詞要先上它的網站查詢英文名

    ※連接詞的使用要注意放對地方

    ※繼續加油!

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • Sunny
  • Hello!My name&#39;s Sunny.I&#39;m from Taiwan.<br />
    Taiwan is a beautiful country.And the poeple is very <br />
    nice.Chien-Ming Wang is from Taiwan,too.He&#39;s a good <br />
    pitcher,and he&#39;s my favorite baseballplayer.
  • Hello! My name's Sunny. I'm from Taiwan. Taiwan is a beauiful country. And the people are very nice. Chien-Ming Huang is from Taiwan, too. He's a good pitcher, and he's my favorite baseball player.

    ※people是複數形,搭配複數動詞

    ※baseball player兩字要分開

    well done~

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • Ruby
  • There are three people in my family;my father,my mother<br />
    and I. I am the only child in my family.In my family,<br />
    I love my mother best.And I love my puppy best because <br />
    Dad and Mom do not have time to play with me.I hope my <br />
    familycan live happily forever.
  • There are three people in my family--my fahter, my mother, and I. I am the only child in my family. I love my mom the best. And I also love my puppy because Dad and Mom do not have time to play with me. I hope my family can live together happily forever.

    ※重複的字句太多囉!!

    ※good job!

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • bettytsai
  • My family have grandma,dad,mom,sister and I.Are five people.But <br />
    the two dogs are also my family.My dad is a manager and my mom is <br />
    a clear.Sister and I are students.She is six grade.I am seven <br />
    grade.We are happy together.
  • There are five people in my family--grandmother, fahter, mother, younger sister, and I. We also have two dogs, and we keep them as family members. My dad is a manager and my mom is a clerk. My sister and I are students. She is on the sixth grade, and I am on the seventh grade. We are happy together.

    ※注意have/ has和There is/ there are的分別!

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • Sunny
  • Hi~I&#39;m Sunny.I&#39;m thirteen years old.<br />
    My favorite book is Harry Poter,it&#39;s a great book.<br />
    Jamie is my sister,and Tim is my brother.<br />
    I&#39;m have a puppy.Her mane is Dodo.<br />
    She is a lovely and smart puppy.
  • 1. Harry Potter, name 拼錯

    2. My favorite book is Harry Potter which is a series of great book.

    3. I have a puppy. 重複動詞了!

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • Ruby
  • The winter is come.The wind also blew hard and made the windows <br />
    sound scary.And I don&#39;t like winter because is very cool.<br />
    I usually catch a cold on cold days.But,it is very comfortable<br />
    to go hiking on cool days.So,I hope every days is not cool.
  • Winter is coming. The wind blows hard and makes the windows sound scary. I don't like winter because it is very cold. I usually catch a cold on cold days. But, it is very comfortable

    to go hiking on cold days. So I hope ...

    1. be+ving

    2. 季節前不加冠詞

    3. 最後兩句矛盾,意義不明

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • bettytsai
  • The weater is cold,because the winter is come.November,December <br />
    and January are in the winter.I like Christmas Day in <br />
    December,because I have gifts.And I also like Chinese New Year in <br />
    the January.Many money are in red package.I can become rich.It&#39;s <br />
    happy.I wish Taiwan can snow,but it can&#39;t.
  • The weather is cold because winter is coming. November, December and January are in winter. I like Christmas in December because I always have gifts at Christmas. And I also like Chinese New Year in January. Much money will be in red envelopes for me so I can be rich for a while. Being rich makes me so happy. I wish it can snow in Taiwan in winter, but it can't.

    1. be+ving

    2. 季節前不加冠詞

    3. on Christmas day 是在聖誕節那一天, at Christmas是在整個十二月聖誕節的期間

    4. 紅包叫做red envelope, 錢money不可數

    5. 注意地方副詞和時間副詞的位置,一般時間副詞在句子最後方,地方副詞在時間副詞之前

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • bettytsai
  • I&#39;m very happy,because can see my friends .And there are <br />
    many new students in my class .I can exercises music.And <br />
    join the music club. There are two new classmates in the <br />
    Clarinet. We are very happy.
  • 1. 主題不明顯,應該用The school starts, I am very happy because I can see my friends.

    2. 練習樂器practice playing the musical instrument in the musical club.

    3. 豎笛隊應該用team

    所以整篇應該是...

    The school starts, I am very happy because I can see my friends. There are many new students in my calss this semester. I can practice playing the musical instrument in the musical club. And there are two new classmates in the clarinet team. We are very happy.

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • Ruby
  • The school start,I am very happy because I can read the <br />
    book in the library,and I can do a lot of things that I like.<br />
    But,I don&#39;t like homework or practice musical instrument.<br />
    So, I like go to school.
  • 1. 開學了,學校要用三單現

    2. 看書不是只看一本或是指定哪一本,所以用複數,並且強調是學校的圖書館

    3. 我不喜歡做作業"和"練習樂器,注意連接詞,而且對等連接詞要注意兩邊的詞性要相同

    4. 最後一句很矛盾,搞不清楚到底喜歡還是不喜歡?

    The school starts, I am very happy because I can read a lot of books in the school library. Also, I can do a lot of things that I like. But, I don't like doing homework and practicing musical instruments. I still like to go to school most of the time.

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • bettytsai
  • Spring is here now.The cherry blossom.It&#39;s very <br />
    beautiful.There are a lot of animals awaking in spring.For <br />
    example,snakes,bears,frogs...... People are happy,because <br />
    spring is comimg here.
  • 這一篇不錯~算通順~真的要挑剔的話...

    1. 櫻花開花Cherry is blooming 或是 Cherry blossoms. (注意動詞時態)

    2. For example,snakes,bears,frogs, ext. (等等)

    3. People are happy because...(because放中間不用逗點)

    4. Spring is coming不用再加here

    5. 第一句Spring is here(春天到了)和最後一句spring is coming(春天快到了)有矛盾喔!

    Spring is here now. Beautiful cherry blossoms. There are a lot of animals awaking in spring, such as snakes, bears, frogs, ext. People are happy in spring.

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • utokubkue
  • Today is a special day that I had moved to San Francisco for <br />
    four months. But now I am sad. Because my English level is <br />
    not good enough to entered Uni here. I just got 19 on my <br />
    English Joint College Entrance Exam in Taiwan. I am worry <br />
    about it. And it is beginning to make me sick. I have no idea <br />
    what to do . So can you give me some advice? Thanks a lot.
  • 所以你現在是在讀語言學校嗎?

    我會建議你語言還不行的時候不要急著進大學去讀

    會很慘

    若可以的話給自己多一點時間讀好語言

    之後進大學去才會比較能夠吸收=)

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • utokubkueutokub
  • sorry<br />
    我是上面的utokublue<br />
    寫作的部分<br />
    也麻煩您改一下吧<br />
    謝囉^ ^
  • ok=)

    1. 第一句的部份是完成式,由於你現在還在舊金山,所以要用現在完成式have moved, 若是用had moved形成過去完成式意思是你曾經搬去舊金山四個月,而現在已經沒在那邊了。

    2. 第二句的not good enough to後面應該加原形動詞enter, 另外university在網路上閒聊時才會寫成uni並且不會大寫,除非你指的是UNI(University of Northern Iowa),所以還是要整個拼出來university,並且大學是可數的,所以要加冠詞a

    3. 第四句“我只得到”應寫成I only got, 若是用I just got意思變成“我剛得到”

    4. 第五句的我擔心應寫成I am worried about ...

    5. 倒數第三句It is beginning to...應寫成It begins to

    所以整篇文章應該是

    Today is a special day that I have moved to San Francisco for four months. But now I am sad because my English level is not good enough to enter a university here. I only got 19 on my English Joint College Entrance Exam in Taiwan. I am worried about it. And it begins to make me sick. I have no idea what to do. So can you give me some advice? Thanks a lot.

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • Dear Anna, my name is Summer, I’m studying English at this <br />
    Monday, but I am sad, because my English ability not good <br />
    enough. When I try to listened ICRT or read the English <br />
    story, I always can real understood what they said or <br />
    written, I was try to improved my grammar too, but it’s not <br />
    effect, could you give me some suggestion abut how to learn <br />
    English, thank you.
  • Hello Summer,

    我想妳所付出的努力沒有看到實質收穫的原因可能是因為你不是那麼懂妳所聽的和所看的是什麼,所以建議你看空中英語教室或是大家說英語,手上有雜誌,再搭配廣播或是電視(公視)的講解,這樣比較容易融會貫通,妳也不會在學習上容易灰心,雜誌裡又有單字句型也涵蓋文法,只要有點耐心一定會進步的!!加油!! (妳的文章要改的話可能要多等幾天喔,最近忙翻了,不好意思!!) 希望我的建議能對妳有點幫助!! =D

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • summer
  • Dear Anna, I want to say thank you to you, you so kindly, I’ll <br />
    try it from your suggestion. Moreover, I want to share a <br />
    good sentence that I saw in the internet (but I’m sorry, <br />
    because I forgot who written) the sentence is “People use <br />
    language to go places and do things. If language is a trip to <br />
    another place, then grammar is a road and vocabulary is a <br />
    car. The car is yours, but the road belongs to everybody.” <br />
    by Summer
  • Hello Summer,

    you so kindly應該寫成you are so kind,在網路上介系詞應該用on,所以是on the Internet, 其中Internet的I要大寫^^

    I love the sentence you posted, good one!!

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • Hi <br />
    My name is Axon and I&#39;m a new ESL student in CANADA. I <br />
    need to improve my English so that I can get used to this <br />
    new environment as quickly as possible. By the way, I&#39;m from <br />
    CHINA(MAINLAND) but I really like Taiwan. I like watching <br />
    your entertaining TV program and not so many government&#39;s <br />
    restrict bill makes Taiwan more free than Mainland. I really <br />
    wanted to learn more about your different lifestyle. So, if you <br />
    can help me with it and my English. I&#39;m appreciate that.
  • 你的英文使用的很好啊

    該不會是愛看"康熙來了"!! 呵呵~

    要注意的是在I really wanted 這裡不要用過去式,就直接I really want to 就可以了,因為你是現在想,如果用wanted就變成以前想但現在不想了;最後一句appreciate已經是動詞,所以前面不用加be動詞;more free用freer會比較好,大概就這樣!這些都不會影響閱讀和理解,所以還好囉!

    關於台灣,有機會的話來一趟吧^^

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • clau7ius
  • HI <br />
    我是上面那位<br />
    My favorite show is <大学生了没><br />
    加我为好友吧!
  • 大學生了沒啊~呵呵~真的是很青春呢!! =D

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • hanst
  • At the end of March, the first draft of essay must be handed <br />
    in to the professor without delay. that&#39;s a big challenge for <br />
    me,for the essay written in English, which is my weakness <br />
    from the beginning of the my born. According to my friend, <br />
    my sentence ought to be overhauled. Not my structure but <br />
    the fundamental grammar rule of English. In view of this, i <br />
    will practice it more everyday. Thank you.<br />
    <br />
    Hanst
  • hi Hanst,

    你文章寫的不錯啊!! 繼續加油!!

    第二句那裡改成That's a big challenge for me, for the essay should be written in English, and that has always been a problem since the day I was born. 意思會比較清楚~不然會有中文英文的感覺~後面說從我出生那一天起對台灣人是覺得很幽默~well done! 其他的沒有什麼問題~加油囉!!;-)

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • sihanlu
  • Dear annayeh or teacher:<br />
    Thank for your kind encouragment and correction. Now, my <br />
    confidence of English shines again after receiving my <br />
    teacher&#39;s letter,saying that much effort needed put on <br />
    sentence structure on Thursday. More importantly, your <br />
    feedback toward the short passage makes me discovery the <br />
    true weakness i have,chinese English. ha ha. I was proud of <br />
    English ability when i was in high school. Now, building the <br />
    brandnew confidence of English emerges as the short-term <br />
    goal i am going to realize. As a student,MBA degree, i study <br />
    in Kaohsiung. Nice to meet you. Thanks.<br />
    <br />
    best regards,<br />
    Hanst
  • hi Hanst, just call me Anna!!^^

    i think your English is good enough to communicate with people, maybe your teacher wants you to be better because you are studying in MBA. now, about the passage above, the only problem is that in this following sentence, "building the brandnew confidence of English emerges as the short-term goal i am going to realize" if you can change the word "realize" to "reach" will be better. we reach goals, and realize some truth. and that's all you need to correct. keep going!!^^

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • sihanlu
  • Dear Anna:<br />
    Long time no see from the last short passage i posted on 11 <br />
    March. Now, i accomplish my first draft of essay, giving a <br />
    hard copy to my teacher yesterday. A big relief of my <br />
    pressure over the recent months comes from the moment i <br />
    am writing on my conclusion remarks. Words fail to express <br />
    my feeling, but myself know that. It is life characteristic of <br />
    challenges making people mature. Who is the people we <br />
    shall salute to ? Mother, of course. Happy mother&#39;s day.<br />
    My facebook: hanst_lu Dear teacher can add my into ur <br />
    friends&#39; list.<br />
    <br />
    Hanst
  • Hello Hanst,

    It is good to hear from you again^^

    about the passage above, there are some "time things" need to be corrected and noticed.

    1. 你的essay已經完成所以accomplish需要用過去式accomplished

    2. giving不適合用在句中, 會感覺句子沒有完成, 所以第二句寫成這樣比較順: Now I accomplished the first draft of my essay and gave a hard copy to my teacher yesterday.

    3. 第三段你是說從幾個月來寫結論當中釋放嗎??一下子現在簡單式一下子進行式, 可是你在描述的是過去的事情...你可以這樣寫 It's a big relief for me since I have been working on the conclusion for months.

    接下來的兩句可寫成 Words fail to express my feelings, but I know it is life character which makes people become mature.

    4. 最後一句的add是動詞, 後面要接代名詞受格,所以要把my改成me



    我發現你喜歡用動名詞, 這樣的話要先研究一下動名詞的用法和它擺放的位置喔!! 句子的時態非常重要, 時態不對會引起誤會喔!!

    大概是這樣, 希望有幫助^^

    Ana 於 2010/09/21 18:03 回覆

  • jamie
  • Are you still fix English?!
    I need help,thank you.

    Everyone learned English when their was young, but who live it? My friend learning it every weekend, but I can't do it because I should take care of my baby that is buzy everyday. some pictures allways lat me remember a good time that I want to U.S. I know if I want to get great English I must learn so hot, if I have 24hr a day.



  • HELLO JAMIE,
    我有空的時候還是會改改作文
    別擔心
    妳就寫
    我會盡量找時間回覆
    以下是修改
    Everyone learned English when they were young, but who live with it?
    they和their的用法請參考代名詞的介紹喔!=)

    My friend learns it every weekend, but I can't do it because I have to take care of my baby which keeps me busy everyday.
    朋友固定在學所以要用現在式,朋友只有一個人所要用第三人稱單數
    should的用法比較硬,會讓人覺得妳不是很情願做這件事,但我想妳一定不是這樣,用have to慧比較柔軟一點
    Some pictures always remind me the happy times in the U.S.
    LET ME REMEMBER 比較中式英文,用REMIND(提醒)會比較好
    HAPPY TIME用複數會表示有許多的快樂時光,而不是只有一個
    I know if I want to use English well I must learn it so hard.
    英文是被使用(use)如果用get(得到)的話後面可能要加上受詞,例如分數(grades)
    努力學習那個字是hard喔=)
    最後一句我不太懂妳意思,不知道妳為何要放那邊?直接省略吧!!

    以上
    希望有幫到妳=)

    Ana 於 2011/01/28 03:50 回覆

  • c83726
  • Dear Anna:
    I just start my new semester recently,in the beginning of the semester i made a silly mistake that i miss to sign up GEPT's second examination,and that must wait until the end of the year......
    Although I taking the exam only for test my English ability,but I still hope I can do my best.

    Thank you for fix my English=)!
  • annawong
  • Today is my sister's birthday.I gave her a surprise.I sang a birthday song and play the guitar suddenly.She said that she felt happy and surprise .She invited me to play on 18 July . I have a plan to give her other surprise.

    希望你能幫我改一改文
  • ~狼羽~
  • Dear Anna:
    When I saw your wedside I was very glad and excited.Because when I was a jenior high school student,I met a English teacher who I didn't like her.At that time I started hate English.Now I am senior high student and I start feel nervous becacse I want to go to National Taiwan University,but in every English test I always get fail.I feel very dispressed and helpless.I don't have a good English foundation so what should I start to do?
    Jessica
  • Sorry. No account in Pixnet.
  • 獻醜了,如有錯誤請指教,歡迎討論:)
    to c83726:

    您已經寫得非常好囉!建議可以小改為:
    Dear Anna:
    I just started my new semester recently.
    >>因為學期已經開始了,所以時態改為過去式started較恰當。
    In the beginning of the semester, I made a silly mistake that I missed to sign up GEPT's second examination, and I have to wait until the end of the year to do so.
    >>第二句與第一句分開描述比較適合,避免句子過長。
    >>miss(錯過),一樣因為已經發生,時態改為過去式missed.
    >>語意如為需再"等"到年底,主詞應為人,所以稍微修飾一下改為I開頭
    Although taking exams is only for getting better understanding of my English ability, I still hope I can do as best as I can.
    >>如果句意為"參加考試主要是了解(測試)自己的英文程度與能力,我仍希望可以盡力做好",建議修改如上。"taking exams" 為句子主詞, "is" 為句子動詞, although/but都是轉折連接詞來連接兩個子句,一個完整英文句子內僅需要一個這樣的轉折連接詞(中文表達通常可以有兩組以上"雖然...但是...")。
  • F.C.
  • to c83726:

    您已經寫得非常好囉!建議可以小改為:
    Dear Anna:
    I just started my new semester recently.
    >>因為學期已經開始了,所以時態改為過去式started較恰當。
    In the beginning of the semester, I made a silly mistake that I missed to sign up GEPT's second examination, and I have to wait until the end of the year to do so.
    >>第二句與第一句分開描述比較適合,避免句子過長。
    >>miss(錯過),一樣因為已經發生,時態改為過去式missed.
    >>語意如為需再"等"到年底,主詞應為人,所以稍微修飾一下改為I開頭
    Although taking exams is only for getting better understanding of my English ability, I still hope I can do as best as I can.
    >>如果句意為"參加考試主要是了解(測試)自己的英文程度與能力,我仍希望可以盡力做好",建議修改如上。"taking exams" 為句子主詞, "is" 為句子動詞, although/but都是轉折連接詞來連接兩個子句,一個完整英文句子內僅需要一個這樣的轉折連接詞(中文表達通常可以有兩組以上"雖然...但是...")。
  • F.C.
  • to annawong:

    獻醜了,歡迎指教討論。
    Today is my sister's birthday.
    I gave her a surprise to sing a birthday song and play guitar suddenly.
    >>單純建議可以合併有關連的兩句成為一句,當然分開寫也是可以的。
    She said that she felt happy and surprised. She invited me to play the guitar on the 11th of July.
    >>"surprise"當名詞,如果是情緒形容詞,要用"surprised"
    >>表示日期,表示方式為on the 11th of July.
    I plan to give her another surprise.
    >>建議可以把plan變成動詞直接用,表示"另一個"用another.
  • F.C.
  • To Jessica:
    Sorry I am not Anna but wishing my response is working for you.
    It is not easy to learn a thing if you "HATE" it. So, first of all, you have to find a way to "LOVE" it. Finding a proper learning method that is a good start to you. There is not such a standard way for everyone to learn English. For example, if you like singing, go get the type of English songs you like, listen to them day by day, memorize the lyrics, and analyze the gramar or the meaning of the lyrics if you like. If you like to see the English movies, go rent some DVDs that you like, turn off the sub-title(or at least turn off the Chinese sub-title), of course turn to English-pronunciation, watch it one time, two times, or even three times if you don't get fully understanding of it. In the process of singing songs or seeing movies, you definitely could look up the vocabularies in the dictionary if necessary.
    My advice may not good for getting good scores or getting a good university, of course not for speed-learning, yet they "TAKE TIME". What I think is, a language is a living thing, it is not a course you just take in school and never use it in your life ever. So please learn English by "USING it"!
    Wish the above ideas help! Good luck!
  • Ana
  • 感謝以上大大的分享及贊助修改!這幾年真是過的水深火熱!望各位見諒...orz
  • 芸
  • Oh.. how sweet... i miss you too...
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